My Edited Version of A Picture of a PLane turns into a story

Early in the morning the Lorrins family are taking the suitcases in the boot. They are heading for the airport. They are leaving to Canada to visit some family members the haven’t seen for almost 3 years. The plane leaves at 6:00 o clock so they better hurry. Mrs Lorrins is still trying to wake up Samantha. She is 8 years old and always loves to sleep in. After 3 minutes she has awaken by a rummm. I asked mum what was that noise she replied back “sweetheart it’s only dad turning on the car” I replied back by saying why ? mum said “Remember we are leaving to Canada to visit Auntie and Uncle.

So then Samantha brushed her teeth,brushed her hair and put on the clothes that her mum left on the bed and ran straight into the back seat of the car. Dad was surprised to see her full with energy. Last time when they were heading for England she was dragging herself to the car and even slept in there and they had to wake her up at the carpark of the airport. That took 7 minutes to do that. So they drove to the airport and they played Samantha’s favorite song. It is you can count on me by Bruno Mars. Arriving at the airport they got there suitcases and ran to the check in point and checked in.

When finishing doing that they ran to the place where you show your passport and other details and they went. They asked the assistant which plane is heading to Canada the lady said the plane on the north side. But by mistaken she meant the east side but she was too late. They already have taken their first step into the plane . That plane was heading for Hawaii.

So the engine of the plane began and they were flying now they have reached up way into the sky. The slept for 7-9 hours and Karen who is Mrs Lorrins looks outside the window and see’s a beach. She asked the pilot where are they and he said “Mamm this plane goes to Hawaii and we are in Hawaii. “Oh no she says the assistant said this plane goes to Canada we are suppose to be in Canada” The Pilot said “I'm very sorry but I got to fill this plane with gas and that gas is suppose to be me going back to Australia. The next flight to Australia will be not after 5 days so you will have to stay here” Ok replied Karen.

She awoke her husband and told him all about what happened but Samantha was actually happy. She would rather be in a hot sunny place then be in the second version of Antarctica. So they went to a motel called the Coconut Motel. Samantha laughed when she heard the name of the motel. There room was 197. Samantha’s parent’s start to settled in but Samantha took her swimming togs and ran to the beach. It was a good thing that the view outside there window was the area Samantha was swimming in.

She told her Parents to come and have a swim and they did. So they made plans of what they would do. For the rest of the 4 days it felt like they were in heaven. The loved on the last day they got a free massage and Samantha got Ice cream. The actually enjoy Hawaii and after 5 days in Hawaii Mr Lorrins said “It wasn't a bad holiday after all” and soon they headed back to Australia to catch the next flight to Canada witch Samantha calls 2 version of Antarctica.

                           

A picture of a plane turns into a story.

Early in the morning the Lorrins family are taking the suitcases in the boot. The are heading for the airport. The are leaving to Canada to visit some family members the haven’t seen for almost 3 years. The plane leaves at 6:00 o clock so they better hurry. Mrs Lorrins is still trying to wake up Samantha. She is 8 years old and always loves to sleep in. After 3 minutes she has awaken by a rummm. I asked mum what was that noise she replied back “sweetheart it’s only dad turning on the car” I replied back by saying why ? mum said “Remember we are leaving to Canada to visit Auntie and Uncle.

So then Samantha brushed her teeth,brushed her hair and put on the clothes that her mum left on the bed and ran straight into the back seat of the car. Dad was surprised to see her full with energy. Last time when they were heading for England she was dragging herself to the car and even slept in there and they had to wake her up at the carpark of the airport. That took 7 minutes to do that. So they drove to the airport and they played Samantha’s favorite song. It is you can count on me by Bruno Mars. Arriving at the airport they got there suitcases and ran to the check in point and checked in.

When finishing doing that they ran to the place where you show your passport and other details and they went. They asked the assistant which plane is heading to Canada the lady said the plane on the north side. But by mistaken she meant the east side but she was too late. They already have taken their first step into the plane . That plane was heading for Hawaii.

So the engine of the plane began and they were flying now they have reached up way into the sky. The slept for 7-9 hours and Karen who is Mrs Lorrins looks outside the window and see’s a beach. She asked the pilot where are they and he said “Mamm this plane goes to Hawaii and we are in Hawaii. “Oh no she says the assistant said this plane goes to Canada we are suppose to be in Canada” The Pilot said “I’m very sorry but I got to fill this plane with gas and that gas is suppose to be me going back to Australia they next flight to Australia will be not after 5 days so you will have to stay here” Ok replied Karen.

She awoke her husband and told him all about what happened but Samantha was actually happy. She would rather be in a hot sunny place then be in the second version of Antarctica. So they went to a motel called the Coconut Motel. Samantha laughed when she heard the name of the motel. There room was 197. Samantha’s parent’s start to settled in but Samantha took her swimming togs and ran to the beach. It was a good thing that the view outside there window was the area Samantha was swimming in.

She told her Parents to come and have a swim and they did. So they made plans of what they would do. For the rest of the 4 days it felt like they were in heaven. The loved on the last day they got a free massage and Samantha got Ice cream. The actually enjoy Hawaii and after 5 days in Hawaii Mr Lorrins said “It wasn’t a bad holiday after all” and soon they headed back to Australia to catch the next flight to Canada witch Samantha calls 2 version of Antarctica.

My edited version of my narrative.

Ding ding ding goes the alarm of Mr Robbins it's  6:00 o'clock in the morning and he is wide awake. He starts his day by watering and feeding his plants and animals. He owns a farm. His wife Mrs Robbins is overseas at Europe at her new job. It has been a week since she left.  Mr Robbins care’s a lot for his animals that’s why he spends from 8 :00 o'clock in the morning till 8:00 at night. That is 13 hours outside. He does that everyday.

One day while picking eggs from the chicken's nest he heard a car stop. He thought it was his brother John. His brother John visited last week with his 4 children 2 girls and 2 boys. The two girls are twins. One name Molly and the other one named polly. The brothers are Sam and Carl. But by his surprise it was the Landlord . His name was Mr Wilson. Mr wilson gave him a note with a sad face  and drove off. He sat down and r.ad it. It said Dear Mr Robbins I am very sorry to say that you have to leave all your crops and animals and move to another place because someone has fully bought the farm and you have only paid half the amount. If you think you can pay the rest in 2 weeks you can keep your farm. Kind regards : Mr Wilson.



He was a very sad man he groaned for about 5 minutes until he heard a ring ring it was his wife calling. He got his cellphone out of his pocket and answered “hello Mr Robbins speaking” Hello it’s me your wife Jenny Im just calling to hear what’s going on there”. So George who was Mr Robbins told Jenny that the Landlord will have to give the farm to another family if they can't pay the rest of the farm in 2 weeks . So Jenny said “Good news I have made 700 dollars and I am coming back tomorrow I will pay it to the landlord when I come and we can have our farm and home” “Thank you so much honey” replied George.



The next day later George got into his car and drove to the airport. It was the first time he woke up at 8:00 to go to the airport. He was so happy. It took him 20 minutes to get to the airport. When he arrived he ran all the way to give his wife a hug. Jenny was surprised to see him so happy. She showed him the 700 dollars and went straight to the landlord and paid it off. So they went home joyful and got to keep 400 dollars because that was the left over and enjoyed a happy life with their animals.

Keep Calm and be a BABY.

Here is a picture of my baby cousin Masina and I made it on Pizap. KEEP CALM AND BE A BABY !!!

Unedited version of my narrative.

This is the first draft of my story. It is an unedited version. 

It’s 6:00 o'clock in the morning and Mr Robbins is wide awake watering and feeding his plants and animals. He owns a farm. While Mrs Robbins is overseas in Europe at her new job. It has been a week since she left. Mr Robbins care’s a lot for his animals that’s why he spends from 6:00 o'clock in the morning till 8:00 at night. That is 14 hours outside. He does that everyday.

One day while picking eggs from the chicken he heard a car stop. He thought it was his brother John. His brother John visited last week with his 4 children 2 girls and 2 boys. The two girls are twins. One name Molly and the other one named polly. The brothers are Sam and Carl. But by his surprise it was the Landlord . His name was Mr Wilson. Mr wilson gave him a note and drove off. He sat down and r.ad it. It said Dear Mr Robbins I am very sorry to say that you have to leave all your crops and animals and move to another place because someone has fully bought the farm and you have only paid half the amount. If you think you can pay the rest in 2 weeks you can keep your farm. Kind regards : Mr Wilson.



He was a very sad man he groaned for about 5 minutes until he heard a ring ring it was his wife calling. He got his cellphone out of his pocket and answered “hello Mr Robbins speaking” Hello it’s me your wife Jenny Im just calling to hear what’s going on”. So George who was Mr Robbins told Jenny that the Landlord will have to give the farm to another family if they can't pay the rest of the farm in 2 weeks . So Jenny said “Good news I have made 700 dollars and I am coming back tomorrow I will pay it to the landlord when I come and we can have our farm and home” “Thank you so much Jenny” replied George.



The next day later George got into his car and drove to the airport. He was so happy. It took him 20 minutes to get to the airport. When he arrived he ran all the way to give his wife a hug. Jenny was surprised to see him so happy. She showed him the 700 dollars and went straight to the landlord and paid it off. So they went home joyful and got to keep 400 dollars because that was the left over and enjoyed a happy life with their animals.

The day at the movies.

In the holidays my sister's and my cousins headed for the movies.  We were going to watch planes. Everyone was so excited. I had 6 girl cousin's coming with me and my sisters of course our auntie and uncle came. It took us probably 20 minutes to get to sylvia Park.

When we arrived there was a little chaos. My Uncle went up to the shops up top and we were looking for him everywhere down bottom. Then we saw him up top and we decided to take the lift up top but then we got to the top my uncle was down bottom. So he decided to take the lift back to the bottom and meet him there. So then we headed straight to the movies.

We went past lots of cool shop's like smiggles and Kiwi yo. Stepping inside of the movies my cousins ran around the place excitedly. My Auntie went to get 14 tickets for everyone. We had some leftover tickets but that was for another day. She ordered us our own drink and popcorn and chocolate Ice cream.

Let the movie begin. Planes started and my baby cousin who was 1 years old was running around crazy up and down the stairs she would shout and have Ice cream all over her mouth. She was a really crazy baby.
The movie was about 1 hour and 30 minutes long. I really enjoyed going to the movies and watching Planes. Maybe one day I might be a pilot flying a plane.

Using Tens and Ones.

Here is a short movie of how using tens and ones. Hope you enjoy :)